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Friday, 14 October 2016

My Narrative Starter

Title : My Unusual Arrival  

A blanket of fog covered the land below with only patches of green grass and some large buildings visible.  

Attention passengers we have landed, please find your belongings and make sure you make your way out through the exit door” a loud voice blurted from the speaker. I unbuckled my seat belt, stood up packed my belongings and headed out the exit door.

The airport was crowded. At first I was not worried, all I could possibly do was search for mum. But she was nowhere to be seen. I was beginning to worry, where could she be.

So I went to ask one of the flight attendants if they knew anything about my mum, but none of them responded to my question. ‘If mum’s not inside the airport then  maybe she could be outside the Airport! ’ I thought to myself. “Yes!” I said, but too loudly. So I made my way outside the airport.

‘Mum?!’ I wondered. I could not believe it was my Mother! I ran toward her
“ Mum it’s me! “ I cried. Hugging her so tightly, but then an unusual face stared down at me. What! I was hugging an old lady. I felt very uncomfortable, so I slowly released her and backed away like when you walk out of an awkward situation.

“ Tracy is that you “ a familiar voice shouted.  I quickly turned around to check who was calling my name. There she was standing there waving her hands in the air as if she was saying goodbye to me.   I could not believe it, it  was my mother's beautiful face.  

I was running towards my mother as fast as a cheetah. We hugged for quite a long time and then we finally parted. A joyful tear rolled down my cheek. I was filled with happiness. I couldn’t wait to go home.

5 comments:

  1. Hi Von,
    I loved your Narrative and it is very funny especially the 5th paragraph. Maybe you could write a Title for your story.

    Keep it up Von!

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  2. Thanks Ana-Lei for reading my Writing, hopefully I will come up with a Great Title...

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  3. Your welcome Von and I hope you think of a GREAT! TITLE!

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  4. Hey Von,
    What I really like about your Narrative Writing was how you used describing words,such as "I was running towards my mother as fast as a cheetah." This made me think about how much you missed your mother. I think it would help if you could check if your sentences make sense.
    Great Job!

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